new sayian warrior

It was rainy that day on New Vegeta. Being only 17 years old alexalex didn't do his training exorcises like he was told. He didn't care, all he cared about was hanging out with his friends. He was never the most powerful Saiyan out of his friends, mostly because of his lack of training. He kept strolling through the grass as the clouds poured buckets of water on him. His hair drenched, and his body shivering in the cold.
All of a sudden a loud crash was heard. Making alexalex jumped and raised his guard. A large explosion erupted from behind the hills. Usually alexalex was not one to want to like adventure but this time he couldn't resist. He ran towards the area it came from.
When he got there he found a large crater in the ground, with smoke pouring out of it. He couldn't see what was in the bottom because of the heavy rain. He slid down the crater to find a small Saiyan ship, still hot from the atmosphere. The door opened, alexalex leaped back just to be safe. A large Saiyan stepped out. He had spicky hair and hard wrinkles. He looked frightening even to a Saiyan teenager. The Saiyan appeared behind alexalex suddenly and hit him in the back of the head without any effort on his part. Alexalex fell to the ground in pain. But then he passed out. He awoke to a beaming sun on his face. He was still in the crater, still wet from the rain. He quickly got up and looked around, afraid the Saiyan was going to strike at him again. Luckily he was gone. Alexalex sighed to himself. He was lucky just to be alive. He sprinted away in a hurry, he was eager to be going home.




Zeny: 150
PL: 40
STR: 15
AGI: 15
END: 5
SPR:8

Uhh, a little shaky I guess, but hopefully you'll improve in time. You seem to be rather in the middle, going to poor typing right through to excellent, there were some great lines in there and some ones that let you down, but dont give up I hope to see you stick around, wait for a mod/admin to approve!

thats it your getting the hang of it ragiko if you were only like your father.shut up about my father your just mad he died on planet vegeta when that tyrant frieza destroied the planet.i oly want whats best for you so the same thing doesnt happen twice