Vegeto saves the city

Vegeto was training. HE wanted to get stronger he then tried to shoot a ki blast but failed. Vegeto was the son of an elite saiyan .suddenly an explosion was caused. Vegeto ran to the scene. He saw a man shooting beams everywhere. What are you doing" Vegeto asked the man calmly. I'm drinking tea. What does do like I'm doing now scram" the man said. No I won't let you do that"Vegeto said .Vegeto then quickly powered up and punched the guy in the face then threw him. What do you think your doing" the man asked. Stopping you" Vegeto said powering up. Very well" The man said and flew to Vegeto. Vegeto grabbed the guy by the leg then threw him. The guy recovered and punched Vegeto in the stomach then threw him and shot a beam at him. Vegeto recovered and dodged the beam but it got him a little on his left arm. This is gettting bad I have to get it right" Vegeto said. He then shot a ki blast. Yes I did it" Vegeto said . He then kicked him in the chin then punched him in the jaw. Vegeto then powered up to 75% of his power. The man charged at Vegeto shooting beams at him. Vegeto charged at him and avoided some but then got hit by more. He then got angry and used all of his power. He could sense all the people hiding this made him even angrier. His power reached its peak. He charged at the man. Punching him in the stomach then kicking him in the back of the neck. Vegeto then throw him to a building. Luckily there was no people there. Sudddenly some stronger saiyans came. We'll take it from here Vegeto" One said. Vegeto then laughed

Technique learned: ki blast

Wc:302

Zeny: 150
PL: 40
Str:10
Agi:10
End:10
Spr:10

((Canon? +It seems like he is a robot: "He saw a man shooting beams everywhere. Vegeto quickly powered up and punched the guy in the face then threw him"
Like, is that a valid response to the situation?))

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((can i say that this is very unrealistic seeing as vegeto's power level is incredibly low for the moment))

This is alright, but you could improve on your description
And some areas need some work.

Vegeto then throw him to a building he then used all his energy in a punch that killed the man

Like what happened to the building, what were the reactions of people in the building, or were there people in the building? Try to wokr on answering a few of these next time and go into more description,

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I still dont like this but at least your trying...
Remeber to add as much detail as possible,

((Still cannon :[ ))

how it canon

Mabey it's cannon because your....VEGETO

doesnt necessarily have to be the same vegeto, he just likes the name

ALso just realized this is 299 words.... don't training have to be 300?

you're going to nit pick at one word? o.o

Rules are rules, they were made for a reason, we can't let anything get away, for a start this sets a bad example and secondly when is too far too far, look I wouldn't care if he was 50 words under, would you let that go, if he was 30 under would you let it go, the way I look at it, 50 under is against the rules, 30 under is against the rules, so 1 under should be against the rules, because why should people who struggle to write long posts, and keep above the 300 word mark, why should they put in and strive to make that mark, achieve it and get approved, and then the people who Im sure do put in, but dont acheive get approved, I see this as unfair no matter how many words it is, we cant let our standards or rules slip, all Im asking now is that he simply adds one more adjective or something, it's easily fixed.

is this approved or not

(( did you correct everything that they said was wrong?))

yes

Well then it most likely is, still wait for Korn to confirm, it shouldn't be too long, stick around.

((Still canon!! And every thing I said was wrong about the writings is still there. You just added random sentences.

"HE wanted to get stronger he then tried to shoot a ki blast but failed. Vegeto was the son of an elite saiyan .suddenly an explosion was caused."

The middle sentence is just out of contex like you just threw it there. And how do you fail at shooting a Ki Blast? Did it miss? Exploded in your hand? Did you ran out of KI?

There are alot of other grammer mistakes and I can sit here and point them out all day so I suggest you give this more then 5 minutes and rewrite it one last time.

Your like doing me a favour when you fix it, choosing to ignore some of my points when you feel like it and making small progress each time.
I won't keep coming here to see you change another sentence here and there and don't put more then a few minutes in it every time, when you just replace a few words/add something while other people here work their ass off to get approved.))

Verbally owned.
Go Korn you tell him!
And may I suggest trying again in a whole new topic Vegeto, a fresh start is best for you...

and a fresh character

xD, well done on such a popular post, maybe next time it'll be for the right things,